Tuesday, March 25, 2008
FREE WRITE
Last year, the Friday before General Conference, some friends came down from Alaska and we went to this club called Studio 600 for the huge General Conference dance they have every six months. We danced until around 1:30am and then everyone decided to go to Denneys in down town Salt Lake. We got there and had to wait for over 25 minutes until finally we sat down at a table and ordered our food. Right before everyone was finishing up I told my sister we needed to leave because we had to drive back to Provo. So we said good bye to everyone, paid and walked out. As we were approaching my sisters car I noticed a tall man about 6'5 leaning against the car smoking a cigar and three heavier set black women standing on the side of him. As I was getting near the car I wasn't sure if I should ask the man to get off the car or just get in and see what he would do. As I was walking past the women to get in the passenger seat I glanced at the man and then looked at the car. All of a sudden, out of nowhere, one of the lady's reached her arm back as far as she could and then swung it forward and slapped me as hard as she could. I was in such shock i didn't know what to say but as i was trying to come back to my senses she started yelling at me "You B--ch". Don't you be looking at my husband you Mo-Fo.. and then she started trying to beat me up but the ladys on the side of her and her husband held her back. I was so angry and every swear word in the book was flying through my brain but i didn't want to sound as stupid as she did so i yelled back " you are so insecure about yourself, i was not checking out your husband" and i got in the car and cried all the way home. I felt so helpless because I left crying but i knew if i tried to defend myself by hitting her she would've killed me. She was like three times my size. It's a great story to tell now that it's over.
RHETORICAL ANALYSIS
Rhetorical Analysis:
1- Argument: Prescription drugs in the U.S are too expensive
2- Audience: People who need prescription drugs but can’t afford them.
3- Ethos: a credible picture because it shows that prescription drugs are too expensive with a twenty dollar bill. There are also other bills in the background symbolizing the waste of money on prescription drugs.
4- Pathos: Appeals to emotion in that the picture gives a feeling of sadness. There is a monopoly on the prescription drugs in the U.S and people can’t afford to pay for the drugs they need because they are so expensive. The coloring of the bottle in contrast with the money also appeals to emotion in that it makes the viewer more aware that they are paying too much money for prescription drugs.
5- Logos: Appeals to logic because pharmaceuticals are too expensive and people need to be aware of it. With the pills spilled out over the money makes the viewer understand that they are paying is not worth what they are getting.
6- Effective because it makes pharmaceutical consumers aware that they are paying too much for their drugs.
7- Sufficient? Yes because even though there aren’t any words it still reminds people that something needs to be done about the pharmaceutical monopoly
8- Typical? It is typical because there are many pictures like this one that are displayed in magazines and in the media
9- Accurate? Yes because almost all pharmaceuticals are overpriced.
10- Relevant? Yes because with the never ending invention of new drugs people need to be aware that they are paying too much so they can look for different alternatives.
1- Argument: Prescription drugs in the U.S are too expensive
2- Audience: People who need prescription drugs but can’t afford them.
3- Ethos: a credible picture because it shows that prescription drugs are too expensive with a twenty dollar bill. There are also other bills in the background symbolizing the waste of money on prescription drugs.
4- Pathos: Appeals to emotion in that the picture gives a feeling of sadness. There is a monopoly on the prescription drugs in the U.S and people can’t afford to pay for the drugs they need because they are so expensive. The coloring of the bottle in contrast with the money also appeals to emotion in that it makes the viewer more aware that they are paying too much money for prescription drugs.
5- Logos: Appeals to logic because pharmaceuticals are too expensive and people need to be aware of it. With the pills spilled out over the money makes the viewer understand that they are paying is not worth what they are getting.
6- Effective because it makes pharmaceutical consumers aware that they are paying too much for their drugs.
7- Sufficient? Yes because even though there aren’t any words it still reminds people that something needs to be done about the pharmaceutical monopoly
8- Typical? It is typical because there are many pictures like this one that are displayed in magazines and in the media
9- Accurate? Yes because almost all pharmaceuticals are overpriced.
10- Relevant? Yes because with the never ending invention of new drugs people need to be aware that they are paying too much so they can look for different alternatives.
Technique application
Paragraph rewrite for paper A:
Original:
In American public schools, parents place a great amount of faith and trust in the school system to nourish their children in both mind and body. This in turn causes the students to also trust in the school. Therefore, by supplying unhealthy food for the students it teaches them bad eating habits which creates a false and misleading perception of what health is. In high school I had a friend who told me she was trying to eat healthy so she pulled out a bagel with strawberry cream cheese. I couldn’t believe she actually thought that she was eating healthy. Such is the case with many students. They get so used to eating fried meat, boxed foods such as potatoes, frozen foods and drinking soft drinks that they begin to think it’s actually healthy. What they don’t realize is that the ingredients included in those foods such as preservatives and other chemicals, can actually cause diabetes, high cholesterol, obesity, acne etc... The school lunch programs need to teach by example and modify their programs to where the students can actually experience what healthy food is.
Rewrite:
One might ask what a healthy diet is. The dietary guidelines describe a healthy diet as one that emphasizes fruits, vegetables, whole grains, is low in saturated fats, trans fats, cholesterol and includes lean meats, poultry, fish, beans, eggs and nuts. Such a diet is taught to students using the food pyramid as a guideline. They learn the importance of having a balanced diet and they know what kinds of foods wouldn’t fit in that category. However, school cafeterias serve foods that are exactly the opposite of what is taught to the students. In supplying unhealthy food it teaches the students bad eating habits because they trust that whatever the school serves is healthy. Therefore, they develop a misunderstanding of which foods are good for them or not. The students then claim that such foods as bagels with strawberry cream cheese or deep fried chicken are healthy because they are “high in protein”. These are false perceptions. Unlike whole wheat bread, white bread, such as a bagel, has been completely stripped of its nutritional value. Also, any food that is deep fried looses almost 70% of its nutritional value because the extreme heat when frying destroys all the essential fatty acids.
Original:
In American public schools, parents place a great amount of faith and trust in the school system to nourish their children in both mind and body. This in turn causes the students to also trust in the school. Therefore, by supplying unhealthy food for the students it teaches them bad eating habits which creates a false and misleading perception of what health is. In high school I had a friend who told me she was trying to eat healthy so she pulled out a bagel with strawberry cream cheese. I couldn’t believe she actually thought that she was eating healthy. Such is the case with many students. They get so used to eating fried meat, boxed foods such as potatoes, frozen foods and drinking soft drinks that they begin to think it’s actually healthy. What they don’t realize is that the ingredients included in those foods such as preservatives and other chemicals, can actually cause diabetes, high cholesterol, obesity, acne etc... The school lunch programs need to teach by example and modify their programs to where the students can actually experience what healthy food is.
Rewrite:
One might ask what a healthy diet is. The dietary guidelines describe a healthy diet as one that emphasizes fruits, vegetables, whole grains, is low in saturated fats, trans fats, cholesterol and includes lean meats, poultry, fish, beans, eggs and nuts. Such a diet is taught to students using the food pyramid as a guideline. They learn the importance of having a balanced diet and they know what kinds of foods wouldn’t fit in that category. However, school cafeterias serve foods that are exactly the opposite of what is taught to the students. In supplying unhealthy food it teaches the students bad eating habits because they trust that whatever the school serves is healthy. Therefore, they develop a misunderstanding of which foods are good for them or not. The students then claim that such foods as bagels with strawberry cream cheese or deep fried chicken are healthy because they are “high in protein”. These are false perceptions. Unlike whole wheat bread, white bread, such as a bagel, has been completely stripped of its nutritional value. Also, any food that is deep fried looses almost 70% of its nutritional value because the extreme heat when frying destroys all the essential fatty acids.
Thursday, March 20, 2008
Free Write
I think there are a lot of people in this world who make life so difficult and stressful for no reason. They run around in a bad mood all the time because they can’t relax. Everything always seems to be going wrong and they simply aren’t happy. Life doesn’t have to be that way. One way to start out is by changing the way you think. It’s really very simple. It’s all a state of mind. If you want to be happy you will be. If you want to be stressed out or angry you will be. Whatever you want to be will be. There’s this really great saying that says “you can if you think you can”. I am a firm believer in this. Most people are in the situation they’re in because that’s where they want to be even if they don’t know it. They don’t have the confidence or discipline to pull themselves out of the hole they’re in so they live in misery. They let failure bring them down. But one must fail in order to succeed so if at first you don’t succeed “try try again”. Eventually things will work out if you don’t give up. The greatest failure of all is when you fail to keep trying.
Technique application
Technique application: Style
Audience: UVSC and BYU students who are desperate.
Raw:
Has it ever occurred to any of you people that there are more important things to occupy your minds with than getting girls numbers? Do you not realize that running around trying to get as many numbers as you can isn’t going to get you a girlfriend? In case you didn’t know, girls can sense right away what your intentions are and if you’re desperate. Everytime I go to any institute dance or party it seems like everybody is on the look out. They can’t just enjoy themselves because they’re so busy trying to be someone they’re not. My advice to you is this: STOP trying so hard. Relax. Let what’s going to happen happen and take it from there. You will be much happier in the long run.
Revised: (change in style)
I have noticed lately that there are many students who concentrate a lot on getting as many girls numbers as they can. This is a mistake because girls can sense what your intentions are and it will scare them off. When you go to a dance or a social gathering try to enjoy yourself and have fun. Don’t try to be someone you’re not. You will notice that more girls will be interested in giving you their number because they can sense your level of maturity and your confidence.
Audience: UVSC and BYU students who are desperate.
Raw:
Has it ever occurred to any of you people that there are more important things to occupy your minds with than getting girls numbers? Do you not realize that running around trying to get as many numbers as you can isn’t going to get you a girlfriend? In case you didn’t know, girls can sense right away what your intentions are and if you’re desperate. Everytime I go to any institute dance or party it seems like everybody is on the look out. They can’t just enjoy themselves because they’re so busy trying to be someone they’re not. My advice to you is this: STOP trying so hard. Relax. Let what’s going to happen happen and take it from there. You will be much happier in the long run.
Revised: (change in style)
I have noticed lately that there are many students who concentrate a lot on getting as many girls numbers as they can. This is a mistake because girls can sense what your intentions are and it will scare them off. When you go to a dance or a social gathering try to enjoy yourself and have fun. Don’t try to be someone you’re not. You will notice that more girls will be interested in giving you their number because they can sense your level of maturity and your confidence.
Tuesday, March 18, 2008
RHETORICAL ANALYSIS
Non-smoking advertisement
Logos: Even though a crush proof cigarette box won’t crush your cigarettes they will send you to your grave in a wooden box.
Ethos: The ad is basically making fun of the cigarette companies who advertise about their new cigarette boxes that will protect cigarettes from crushing. It shows people what cigarettes will do to you with makes the ad more credible. The warning sign on the bottom left hand corner says that the surgeon has determined that cigarette smoking is bad for your health. This makes it credible in that if doctors are saying so then we should believe them.
Pathos: three cigarettes are placed in their casket on the day of their funeral which definitely catches the attention of the viewer. Gives a sense of fear that if you don’t quit smoking you will be the one in the casket. Also shows that hard boxes can’t maintain your health.
Sufficient? It is sufficient enough to catch attention. It makes the viewer have to look at it for a second to get the message and when he does it’s a little comical because the message is completely true.
Typical? Definitely typical to other non-smoking ads but also a little unique which is why it’s an attention grabber.
Accurate? Argument is accurate in that it states that if you smoke you will eventually see your death bed. Everyone knows this is true.
Relevant? Yes because so many people smoke nowadays that it is very relevant to people who need inspiration to quit.
Logos: Even though a crush proof cigarette box won’t crush your cigarettes they will send you to your grave in a wooden box.
Ethos: The ad is basically making fun of the cigarette companies who advertise about their new cigarette boxes that will protect cigarettes from crushing. It shows people what cigarettes will do to you with makes the ad more credible. The warning sign on the bottom left hand corner says that the surgeon has determined that cigarette smoking is bad for your health. This makes it credible in that if doctors are saying so then we should believe them.
Pathos: three cigarettes are placed in their casket on the day of their funeral which definitely catches the attention of the viewer. Gives a sense of fear that if you don’t quit smoking you will be the one in the casket. Also shows that hard boxes can’t maintain your health.
Sufficient? It is sufficient enough to catch attention. It makes the viewer have to look at it for a second to get the message and when he does it’s a little comical because the message is completely true.
Typical? Definitely typical to other non-smoking ads but also a little unique which is why it’s an attention grabber.
Accurate? Argument is accurate in that it states that if you smoke you will eventually see your death bed. Everyone knows this is true.
Relevant? Yes because so many people smoke nowadays that it is very relevant to people who need inspiration to quit.
Saturday, March 15, 2008
TECHNIQUE APPLICATION
INTRO ATTEMPTING TO USE STYLE
How many people do you know that believe anything is possible? Do YOU believe anything is possible? I once had a friend tell me that he believed anything was possible. To challenge him I asked “can you clean out your ears with your elbows?” He stood there for a second and then shut right up. With one simple question his belief that all things are possible crumbled to ground. What he didn’t realize though is that all things ARE possible. His testimony just wasn’t strong enough. Therefore, the first time he was challenged he gave in. If you want something bad enough you CAN obtain it. It might take months even years but with willpower, discipline, self esteem and a positive attitude ANYTHING is possible. You might ask how it is possible then to clean out your ears with your elbows. If you wanted that bad enough you could cut off your arm, stretch out your ear and then clean it. To make anything possible the first thing to do is begin by controlling your thoughts. These alone are the determining factor to any success in life. It is with the power of the human mind that all things are possible. Today I’m going to talk about how believing in yourself can help you find success in all areas of your life.
How many people do you know that believe anything is possible? Do YOU believe anything is possible? I once had a friend tell me that he believed anything was possible. To challenge him I asked “can you clean out your ears with your elbows?” He stood there for a second and then shut right up. With one simple question his belief that all things are possible crumbled to ground. What he didn’t realize though is that all things ARE possible. His testimony just wasn’t strong enough. Therefore, the first time he was challenged he gave in. If you want something bad enough you CAN obtain it. It might take months even years but with willpower, discipline, self esteem and a positive attitude ANYTHING is possible. You might ask how it is possible then to clean out your ears with your elbows. If you wanted that bad enough you could cut off your arm, stretch out your ear and then clean it. To make anything possible the first thing to do is begin by controlling your thoughts. These alone are the determining factor to any success in life. It is with the power of the human mind that all things are possible. Today I’m going to talk about how believing in yourself can help you find success in all areas of your life.
Friday, March 14, 2008
Rhetorical Analysis
ART AS ARGUMENT
WATCO advertising an expensive product on people who can’t afford to buy shoes?
CLAIM: Advertising expensive products will have a negative effect on people who live in poverty.
ETHOS: An add can either make or break the impact it has on its viewer. Thisadd is by far one of the most non-credible add I’ve ever seen. The purpose of it is to promote Nike products but in reality it makes the audience think that even those who live in poverty and filth, if they can’t afford to buy Nike, “Just Do It” because peeing on a wall will make them come closer to affording the product.
PATHOS: Very appealing to emotion in that it makes the viewer feel guilty because he’s buying expensive products while there are people like the boy in the picture who are starving and don’t have any clothes to ware. It also makes the viewer feel like he doesn’t want to buy the product any more.
LOGOS: The add makes no sense because who is its audience? Are they trying to appeal to a poverty stricken country or people in the U.S? either way it’s not logical to advertise clothing and have a person on the advertisement basically naked and barefoot living in a dump.
WATCO advertising an expensive product on people who can’t afford to buy shoes?
CLAIM: Advertising expensive products will have a negative effect on people who live in poverty.
ETHOS: An add can either make or break the impact it has on its viewer. Thisadd is by far one of the most non-credible add I’ve ever seen. The purpose of it is to promote Nike products but in reality it makes the audience think that even those who live in poverty and filth, if they can’t afford to buy Nike, “Just Do It” because peeing on a wall will make them come closer to affording the product.
PATHOS: Very appealing to emotion in that it makes the viewer feel guilty because he’s buying expensive products while there are people like the boy in the picture who are starving and don’t have any clothes to ware. It also makes the viewer feel like he doesn’t want to buy the product any more.
LOGOS: The add makes no sense because who is its audience? Are they trying to appeal to a poverty stricken country or people in the U.S? either way it’s not logical to advertise clothing and have a person on the advertisement basically naked and barefoot living in a dump.
Tuesday, March 11, 2008
Free Write
I'm sitting in front of this computer feeling very overwhelmed with school and my huge mid-term tommorrow. I realize that i have only ten minutes to write something for this blog and i am so annoyed that i have to do it. I plan on staying up all night studying and then waking up at 6:00am to continue. It's only Tuesday night but it feels like Friday. It's already been a long week for me. I can't stand to think about what my day tommorow has in store for me. The main reason for my stress is because of my Hobby: Dance. I have a competition this thursday and Friday night in the Mariott center that i've been practicing for since December. I've paid hundreds of dollars for professional lessons. Why? Because i love to dance even though i can't afford it time or money wise. But it's worth it. Also, Because of my crazy practice schedule of 2.5 hours a day i have not had not even a moment to study for my test tomorrow. i looked through my notes and there are at least 100 pages i have to go through tonight. Life is Great!
Saturday, March 8, 2008
Technique application
Different Introductions:
1- Using both sides:
There are many different few points on what eating health is. Some people believe that in order to be completely healthy you need to eat from all the sections of the food pyramid. This includes breads, meats, fruits, vegetables, grains, sugars and so on. Other people believe that eating purely vegetables and occasionally some chicken or turkey is the best way to stay healthy. Still, others are fruitarians who eat purely fruit and nothing else. These people believe that although there are minimal amounts of protein in fruit, what it does contain is of the highest quality of protein. In this way they justify that they are eating healthy. Today I am going to focus on these different view points of eating healthy and talk about the pros and cons of each eating style.
2- Story intro:
As many of you know, I grew up in a small town in Mexico into a family of thirteen children. Education was never considered to be important because people could make money without and education. Therefore, my family strongly opposed my determination to receive an education and ever since junior high I had to fight to graduate from high school. The high school that I attended was a small, rundown, three class room building where no more than 70 students attended. Although I did not receive the education that I was capable of because of the way the program was set up, I was still able to graduate and somehow make my way into Brigham Young University. Today I am going to talk about why receiving an education is important and why I was determined to make something better of my life.
1- Using both sides:
There are many different few points on what eating health is. Some people believe that in order to be completely healthy you need to eat from all the sections of the food pyramid. This includes breads, meats, fruits, vegetables, grains, sugars and so on. Other people believe that eating purely vegetables and occasionally some chicken or turkey is the best way to stay healthy. Still, others are fruitarians who eat purely fruit and nothing else. These people believe that although there are minimal amounts of protein in fruit, what it does contain is of the highest quality of protein. In this way they justify that they are eating healthy. Today I am going to focus on these different view points of eating healthy and talk about the pros and cons of each eating style.
2- Story intro:
As many of you know, I grew up in a small town in Mexico into a family of thirteen children. Education was never considered to be important because people could make money without and education. Therefore, my family strongly opposed my determination to receive an education and ever since junior high I had to fight to graduate from high school. The high school that I attended was a small, rundown, three class room building where no more than 70 students attended. Although I did not receive the education that I was capable of because of the way the program was set up, I was still able to graduate and somehow make my way into Brigham Young University. Today I am going to talk about why receiving an education is important and why I was determined to make something better of my life.
Thursday, March 6, 2008
Rhetorical Analysis
1-Argument: the prospect of climate change has the world searching for alternative sources of energy other than fossil fuel.
2-Audience: Americans who are middle class with medium income who care about the problems associated with fossil fuels.
3- Ethos: a very credible article in that the author gives statistics and percentages as well as personal examples. He also involves the audience in his argument making them feel like he knows exactly what they are going through.
Pathos: Appeals to emotion in that it gives the audience the opportunity to think about how they are effecting the environment which makes them feel a sense of guilt as well as urgency like if they need to stop contributing to the problem. Also makes the audience feel afraid that if they don’t do something about it something drastic is going to happen.
Logos: The author has a balanced perspective on the argument where he addresses both sides of the issue. Because of his use of statistics and percentages he makes the reader think logically about the problem. If fossil fuels are causing all these kinds of problems and there is a better alternative, why not change right?
4- The argument in this article is effective because with his use of credibility, emotional appeal and logic the author is able to persuade his audience that alternative sources of energy such as renewable energy might be the better route to take.
2-Audience: Americans who are middle class with medium income who care about the problems associated with fossil fuels.
3- Ethos: a very credible article in that the author gives statistics and percentages as well as personal examples. He also involves the audience in his argument making them feel like he knows exactly what they are going through.
Pathos: Appeals to emotion in that it gives the audience the opportunity to think about how they are effecting the environment which makes them feel a sense of guilt as well as urgency like if they need to stop contributing to the problem. Also makes the audience feel afraid that if they don’t do something about it something drastic is going to happen.
Logos: The author has a balanced perspective on the argument where he addresses both sides of the issue. Because of his use of statistics and percentages he makes the reader think logically about the problem. If fossil fuels are causing all these kinds of problems and there is a better alternative, why not change right?
4- The argument in this article is effective because with his use of credibility, emotional appeal and logic the author is able to persuade his audience that alternative sources of energy such as renewable energy might be the better route to take.
Wednesday, March 5, 2008
Free Write
The prospect of climate change has the world searching for alternatives to fossil fuel to keep our homes warm, our factories humming, and our cars moving. Energy plays a prominent role in human society. As a result of technological and industrial development, the demand for energy is rapidly increasing. Existing energy sources that are mainly fossil fuel based are leaving enormous amounts of waste and pollution apart from diminishing supply of fuel (Ramachandra). Therefore, the focus is now shifted to other sources of energy. Collectively known as alternative or renewable energy, possible sources include solar, wind, tide, biomass, geothermal, hydropower, and hydrogen. Renewable energy technologies are clean sources of energy that have a much lower environmental impact than other types of energy. Solar energy is one such renewable type. We have used the energy of the sun as far back as 5,000 years ago. People "worshipped" the sun. The influence of the sun appears in religions such as Hinduism, Buddhism, the Aztecs of Mexico, the Incas of Peru, and many Native American tribes (solar energy). Today I’m going to talk about the ways solar energy can have a positive effect on the environment as well as how it can lower the costs of energy for consumers.
Sunday, March 2, 2008
Free Write
It’s so weird to think about now but high school was one of the most crazy times of my life. I moved from a little, small three classroom school in Mexico to a school in Minnesota three stories high with 2600 students. I remember my first day of school. I had never felt so scared and lost in my life. The thing that scared me the most was that I was not sure of my abilities to take classes in an American school. I had never been taught in English before and after the first day I realized that I was very far behind the rest of my classmates. For the first two weeks I switched classes like 10 times trying to find the right ones for me. I ended up in classes mostly filled with sophomores although I was a senior which was very humiliating to me but somehow I managed. I felt the same way when I came to BYU. I was so afraid of not being capable of doing well because there were so many things I had never learned. But I did make it through high school and I’m still at BYU on an Academic scholarship which is a testimony to me that even if you’re not the smartest person in the world, if you make a sincere effort to do well you can make it.
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